My Lyrics
September 16, 2009 1:58:05 AM UTC Post #1

So I sat down and wrote some lyrics for my band...this is my first ever attempt and English is not my native language but i though i should give it a go...Anyway here they are, please tell me what you think any opinion is welcome...Thanks in advance....
(No title yet)
trying to hide I hear you calling my name
Fade out, I choke, Every breath I take
In my eyes, there is nothing there but fear
Absolution, kill everything that's near
Dig up my grave and bury all my dreams
the constant struggle of being alive
Living is so hard
Making my way through this mess we have caused
any purpose of life is now lost
Lost within this disenchanted belief
It's easier now-turn my back, wash away you all
This disease is no longer consuming me
You had your chance

I'm waiting for your opinion, thanks for taking the time....


http://www.reverbnation.com/c./a4/1783994/689790/Artist/0/User/link

October 01, 2009 12:34:12 AM UTC Post #1

A+

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BLACK.DIAMOND.SKYE.

January 17, 2010 5:41:19 AM UTC Post #2

good job :)

January 18, 2010 12:42:12 PM UTC Post #3

Very nice lyrics, I'm impressed :)

Jake

March 19, 2010 3:44:08 AM UTC Post #4

nice lyrics, but on the side of constructive criticism,, before i say it i do like your lyrics, but every song has a theme or a message, just off reading your lyrics, theres no theme, they just seem to be random lines thrown in. so use all of those lines, just when they all relate to each other. pls dont be offended they are good, thats just one way to make them better.
theyre good keep writing

March 19, 2010 2:45:04 PM UTC Post #5

That sounds pretty cool. Do you have a full band recording?

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